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  1. “Once there was a silly ol’ ram, thought he’d punch a hole in a dam; no one could make that ram, scram, he kept buttin’ that dam. Oops there goes a billion kilowatt dam!”

    • I knew I could count on you, Sir Gaylon, to come up with a way to express the perseverance it takes to keep on keeping on. Thanks for visiting the site.

  2. Hello, Tosh
    How are you?
    It’s not really important, is it? But in the moment, yes, it is.
    The view from here is mixed. Sad not to have cut the mustard, but thank heaven for reviews. They were, strangely, very positive and useful. Can see where the excerpt fell down in their eyes, and the fact they wanted to read on was encouraging.
    I feel that after all this, even with the sudden death of optimism, there’s an afterlife for the book.
    It’s been an invigorating, a quickly, on your marks experience. And being of the thin skinned variety, that’s something. Having to write a pitch, focusing on the excerpt, being ‘sensible’ about expectations, and learning on the hoof, can only prepare one for the bigger battle, or at least reality. Yes, you, sanguine, know all this already, and have given great advice throughout.
    Altho he wasn’t the one I entered, look out for Mr. Light, you may like him.

    Write back and tell me how you got on, if you feel like it.

    Billie

  3. Billie:

    In the immediate aftermath, the disappointment reigns. How could anyone not like it? Then I have to remember that after making it to round two, I had little expectation of advancing further based on my concern that the reviewers wouldn’t take kindly to not seeing the main character on stage. In many of the the novels I read, thrillers and mysteries mostly, it’s quite common to begin in the pov’s of the bad guy and the victim. During the weeks of waiting for the results, however, I conveniently forgot about my doubts and allowed optimism to set me up for the fall.

    I didn’t realize the reviews had been posted until I read your comment this morning. Neither one mentioned the absence of the main character, so my preconceived notion had no merit. Both thought the opening did a good job of establishing more questions than answers, always a good thing for a mystery. The excerpt was better than many they had read, but . . .

    . . . there wasn’t much dialogue. It’s hard to judge a novel without seeing the dialogue. Okay, maybe that’s true, but the killer wasn’t chatting with anyone while up to his nefarious act, and the victim was alone, so who are they going to talk to? That criticism baffles me, frankly.

    In relation to the set-piece flying scene, (this is an aviation mystery, after all) in which the victim is struggling with bad weather and airplane problems, there was too much detail. Okay, this reader didn’t care for that, but other readers who like thrillers have commented on how I was able to put them right there in the cockpit with the pilot, which happens to be exactly what I intended. I am well aware of the fact that many readers aren’t into technical detail. This novel isn’t for them, and it’s the luck of the draw, I suppose, that the reviewer didn’t find that interesting.

    And here’s a real jewel. One reviewer said that the absence of a connection between the two characters was confusing. No connection? Remember, now, this is a mystery/thriller and there will be things called “clues.” You have to read carefully if you want to pick them up. They can’t be too cryptic, of course. The author has to give the reader a chance.

    Okay, so the fact that the bad guy sneaks past a security guard he hopes he doesn’t have to end up killing and enters an airplane hangar belonging to Schiller Aviation, then does something really sneaky in relation to an airplane with the call letters N924DP before escaping unnoticed, and in the very next chapter the victim arrives at Schiller Aviation for a flight, sees a news report that convinces him he should fear for his life, then rushes out and climbs in N924DP, there’s no connection? Maybe I should have included footnotes to make it clearer.

    Then there’s the comment about “clunky” writing and lots of the sentences need to be revised. Hmmm. I’m not sure what the reviewer expects or needs to give my prose a better evaluation, but like anything else, it’s all in the eyes of the beholder.

    We all know that, of course. Neither of these two anonymous readers saw sufficient merit in the excerpt to advance me to the quarter-finals. And while I’m disturbed by that, it just so happens that within a few days of these results, two submissions to agents of a query letter and 5- to 10-page writing sample resulted in requests for a full manuscript.

    Well, now. What am I to make of that? I might respond with a, “See, I told you so.” Or maybe I could give more credibility to the Amazon reviewers than the literary agents and anticipate that they will end up rejecting my story for the same reasons.

    Or maybe it’s best not to anticipate anything. The fact that my query and writing sample haven’t resulted in 100% form rejections is at the very least a small ray of sunshine on the horizon. I think I’ll just take the longer view and focus there.

    So glad to hear that your experience contains positive aspects. It’s a trite and overused saying, but whatever doesn’t kill us makes us stronger, right?

    Best,

    Tosh

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